Silver Shoon - penultimate draft

Sometimes you don't need every picture if you want the reader to create an own illusion - like miro2 said.
But I like pictures. A children's book without pictures is not as funny as it is with the pictures. They are like a good family or friends - they belong together ( together everyday... )

And you said this is a story written by your daughter and you share your pictures it created in your brain. They fit together in a very good way. Especially for me it is a very good help to understand everything - my first language is German. I am not very good in speaking English - maybe I was in school, but I haven't used English for many years...

Rather unnecessary in my opinion. I´d try to shorten that pictures down into the text.
It depends on how you ´re looking at it. In film or theatre you usually do a discarding version of old/first stuff, that is what I would do.
So, pics should give the opportunity to use your own illusion, as every story should.
By the way, film is working on a storyboard which is like a cartoon in the first step.

Well, trying to feel the story it is pretty heartbreaking.
Don´t need pages like no. 6 for that, preferring no. 13, where the eyes give an extrasight.
I would try to shorten that down in pictures; text is good as it is now.