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Imaginary Daughter 036 - 040
It's a shorter batch of pages this time, but I wanted to share them with you already. Hopefully you'll like them.
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karchesky |
deleted_690 |
karchesky |
I'm not sure if it's the best way to tell a story either. It's just the way I chose - or more like the way this story unfolded in my mind, in that I never really considered other ways of telling it. And indeed it's dangerous in that you need to engage the reader and keep her engaged while going out on a limb... again, it comes down to storytelling skills, of which I'm not sure I have a lot.
As for this fourth-wall-playing-around, I realize it's been around forever, though I haven't seen anything like this before (or I wouldn't have done it). Personally I neither particularly like it or dislike it on principle. Rather I like it if it's well done. I'm thinking about Grant Morrison's Animal Man run, for some instances of well done fourth-wall breaking. I hope my little experimentation here came out well. And again, I hope when the story is over it will make more sense, in that through these little things you might better understand the nature of the world we're in.
Anyways, thanks for reading :)
deleted_177 |
Your style is good though. I like the choice of color on the last page.
deleted_690 |
The purpose of the journey will become clear in the end? I am not so sure if that is a method that keeps the reader interested. In the Christmas Story, for example, the ghosts want to show Scrouge the spirit of Christmas, which is made clear from the beginning. But maybe this is just one out of many ways to tell an interesting story.
So far, your story is about playing around and have senseless fun. If that is your intention, rock on!
karchesky |
boy |
karchesky |
As for the relationship between a child and an adult, that's something that worried me as well when I started this story. But there are a couple of things I try to keep in mind: first, that such a relationship might be completely innocent from both parties, and that's how it always should be. After all, it's the way children relate to their parents and other relatives, their older neighbors, and so on. Just because sometimes bad things happen as we all know, that doesn't mean that we should be creeped out by default. The vast majority of mankind would never do these things, and so I think we'd be better off looking at the world with innocent eyes ourselves... if that makes any sense.
The other thing to keep in mind in this particular case is that Daughter is a figment of Father's imagination. Even though she appears to show independence and such, in the end she's not different from an imaginary friend. As such, you're not actually witnessing the relationship between an adult and a child, but rather a sort of dialogue between different aspects of the same individual.
Anyways, I hope to someday be able to sell you on the plot of Imaginary Daughter :D
deleted_690 |